me agen maestrorage
as allways u get 10 stars from me i luv ur work
Reviews for "_-={The Metal Visage}=-_"
MaestroRage responds:
hello geacu :D. Good to see you again!
Thank you for the 10 stars, i'm glad you liked the piece! Thanks again for the review!
another great work of art by MaestroRage
what i see is a man grieving his family's horrendous butchering by a Demon. As he mourns his family a primal rage sets off in his brain and he runs to his only remaining horse from the burning stables. He starts gallop off into the never ending horizon of dew covered fields of green. He spends many nights and days looking for the ancient doorway to hell. After months of doing odd jobs, mercenary work, and looting bandit camps he finally found it. He stared into the Gate of Hell. The sides of the gate were covered by numberless bodies of heros who have tried to close the gate. He sniffed the air, it was the smell of gore, burnt human flesh, and something...indescribable. He walked towards the 400ft
gate not even flinching at the sounds of gargantuan demons. When he enters the gate he sees a world drenched in fire, hearing thousands of cries by the souls of dead, and seeing enormous demons that could destroy billions of sentient beings with out effort. He screamed with a voice so vicious that even the biggest demon noticed. "Were in this confounded place is Shra'gro'bliem!"
He heard the foot steps he ever so remembered. The demon approached with proud strides. The demon said in a thundering voice "So your the one who called my name," "I sensed a more mighter foe than you" "Prepare to die Shra'gro'bliem" yelled Burick. Burick ran towards The Demon with a warcry that even Shra'gro'bliem shivered. Burick drew his sword, it was a sword that gleamed with such brilliance that it made his foe think of one thing. "NO NOT THAT SWORD!!!" Burick saw the fear on his face for just a moment. Burick leapt into the air with such might it propelled him five in to the air to cleave his foes head in two. Shra'gro'bliem caught Buricks hand holding the shining sword. Shra'gro'bliem said to Burick with that thunderous voice "This is why no one human being has ever closed this gate the fail to realize how weak they are." and with a smile on his face he tore Burick in two with his mighty muscles. He heard the distinctive clang of the sword hitting the scorched rock. "Ah this thing." He picked it up and threw it into the fiery pits of hell and walked away leaving the corpse of his fallen foe to be scavenged by the underlings of Hell.
Great ending if i say so myself ^_^;
MaestroRage responds:
O_O
I must admit I was expecting... a somewhat happier ending. This man spends months training, killing, looting to find this place. Runs with no fear straight into the arms of hell itself, garnishes a weapon which clearly even the demon fears... and then dies a horrible horrible death :(
Seems like wasted effort. The fact he's gonna be down there for a long long time is even more saddening.
Your descriptive words are used well in the story, there are a few places where words are misused, but overall, you write very well Blood-Raven! I think you could become a great writer someday.
Thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it!
hmmmm
Seemed too light, almost like a forest labrynth with a madman runing around and the hero distroying him.
but thats only my opinion
MaestroRage responds:
and a valid opinion at that!
Thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it! I apologize for the late response.
Well butter my butt and call me a biscuit
This is excellent. Very well-paced. Keep it up!
MaestroRage responds:
Can i just butter this muffin and call it a bagel?
Thank you for the review, i'm glad you liked it! I apologize for the late response!
creepy yet nice
i didnt read the story, i got the idea... this song is a little creepy... i didnt like the laughs, and the melodies in the first half were really weak. they got better as it progressed with a beter tempo that established exitement, the string harmonic phrases were also weak, should this be remade there is plenty of room for improvement. the fact that this is slow to reach the fast paced section created the effect of mystery, which in my opinion you could have done better with, good start for this song, leaves a marble road for improvement.
MaestroRage responds:
quite true. I didn't quite like how the latter half ended up to be honest. The strings are somewhat badly equalized, and could be molded to fit in better.
Strangely however, I like how the rest of it plays out. This is one of those "personal" preferences of mine. I KNOW that harmonically this doesn't quite work, even has a good amount of clashing notes, but I like it.
I might remake it, though to be honest, the chances of this are slim. I do however appreciate the honesty, thank you TsizzinC.
Thank you again for the review, I apologize for the late response!