Good work on the animation. The mixture and changes of the art style throughout the episode is a nice touch, and it mantains the attention of the viewer. Sadly, that won't make your show stick out from the rest, what would be a pity, since I would love to see this series developing it's own fandom.
My main problem is with the writing and the music. The characters are way too cliché, so are their reactions, it looks like you're plagiarising every anime ever. Not that I have a problem, and if it's what you want to do go ahead, but it makes the characters lose appeal, in my opinion. The dialogues, well, the aforementioned statement it's applicable. All in all, I think you should put more personality into the characters and the dialogues. You already have your own style in the art section, why not give it a go on the writing.
I like how you have envisioned it as a animated comic, we don't see a lot of that nowadays (even less taking into account you are doing this pretty much on your own).
On the other hand, I think you went too far on using videogame songs. Even though the music is very good, and all of us veiwers recognize many (or all) of the tracks, it gives away the opportunity to feel that we are watching something new. It can be
In conclusion, seems promising, and I'm looking forward to chapter 2. Very keen on the art, not so much on the writing, and would love to hear music that I haven't heard before next time.
Good job and good luck!
PD: I apologize if something sounds weird or I have commited some kind of mistake, English is not my first language.