Reviews for TOP 10 FACTS (NATA '15 Open Round)

[ArcadeDominator]

I hope this review is not going to be harsh, but let me tell you your mistakes (make sure that you know this is just an opinion). First of all, there was only very tiny details in the background, there was only a trash can next to the table and computer, I don't think there was a bed in the background, even a door.
This is pretty much common or non-unique, the microphone was quality was not that good either, well I wouldn't mind if the microphone had a bad quality if, you at least got an average voice actor, by the sound of it you just slapped on your voice into the animation. Ah, the mainstream, "fat guy who spits everywhere behind his computer all the time", I mean I guess that joke was funny the first 100 times, but it's getting pretty old. Also, the way he intensely click the mouse, were you trying to make it funny? Now back to the details. You only focused on the main character, and main object, heck even the main object did not get all the details. For example, Facebook, you did not add the advertisement bar in the side, or shit like those. I don't really have much anything to say anymore, because I wanna cut you some slack here, since, it's your first animation. I think it would have been more helpful, if you started showing your animation to the public, instead of automatically joining a contest. But hey, it's your choice, I'm just giving you some taste of feed back.

Good luck on your future animation!

TrohPee responds:

This isn't my first animation by any means, just the first on this account. Thanks for your opinion on this though, I'll definitely try and fix some of this stuff in my next NATA video coming up. I did think by joining NATA as kind of an unknown name could come off as kind of odd, but I thought joining would be a great learning experience that I didn't want to pass up. Thanks for the honesty though, that's how I get better!

[f4rage]

its good

[Flikkernicht]

I usually don't spill my thoughts if I feel this way about a cartoon, but seeing this at four stars with no genuine critique in the reviews section makes me kinda feel like I have to.
My main problem with this lies in the writing-- everything about this cartoon is incredibly derivative. I'm not an expert at comedy writing, but like, come on dude. The whole "fat guy behind a computer" bit's been done to death, and I thought that was pretty much an agreed upon fact among animators nowadays. More importantly, though, are the silly voice and the wacky faces making up 99% of what's "funny" about the cartoon. That's not humor dude. You can't just substitute that in lieu of writing actual jokes. I know it's the go-to critique for those who don't know shit about flash animation to dismiss something for being "too much like hellbenders/pebbles/oney", but honestly, that's what it feels like here. It feels like you're taking a lot of influence from popular flash animators, but nothing about this cartoon really feels unique and it doesn't feel like you really made anything your own. Whereas they're all doing their own thing, it seems like you're just trying to imitate and emulate what you're seeing come out from them. I could be entirely wrong, but that's how it comes off. I will admit though that the visual gags "red is a good color" and the other one about "it's dark and lonely in here" were funny, I liked those.
The animation seemed solid enough but the lineart was kinda distracting. That's really my only qualm with the visuals.
I see this is the only thing you have uploaded, so assuming that you started recently I will say I think you've got potential. You just gotta put more thought into what you're writing. Using something as inspiration is good, but flat-out rehashing is not.
Hope that helps, and hope I wasn't too harsh, I don't like having to be "THE BAD GUY"

TrohPee responds:

I'm not offended in the slightest! This review was really much needed for me and its awesome coming from someone like yourself whose work I really admire. But yes I'm aware there isn't much of a story other than trying to make fun of click bait sites, but I tried to put more of an emphasis on animation quality on this one considering it's for NATA. Seriously, thanks for the awesome review though- I'll try to fix a number of these things as I make more animations.

[sharpnova]

Damn son you straight up told it like it be. #rapekit

[deathink]

Wow, you told it how it is!!!

TrohPee responds:

I always tells it like it is yo! #Respekt