I Love it!!! <3! I know is your first game, but it was pretty well. I only suggest to you a sequel! with music, please, because the plot was pretty interesting and the music could add more suspense to the game.
I like it so much! Please make a sequel >w< <3
color, music, maybe voices, and defiantly work on your art and make it look more like a final picture rather than the beginning sketches.
I think you should make this more interactive so there'll be less dialogue. You should go back and add color too. I'd make this one better then do a second one. But either way I'd play more of games.
I like the direction it was taking but it could have been more thought provocative and challenging than it was. The artwork could definitely use alot of work, but I rather like the black and white style. Also if you do plan to make a sequel please note to maybe add some music to it. Keep these tips in mind and i think your next game should make more of an impact than this, but not bad for a first try.
Before I write my review, you should understand that I rate and review very fairly. I generally review pieces of junk that ought to be blammed as no stars, and pieces of almost-junk or things that people clearly put no effort into as 0.5 stars or ones. 1.5 stars and up are standard "good, but could be better" to "great!" I typically never review anything as above 4.5 stars, because nothing is just THAT GOOD.
With that out of the way, it's pretty good, but you need to work on it more. It needs music, sound effects, and most importantly color. You should also try to work on your writing so that dialogue feels more natural, and not like it's forced to serve the plot. Aside from that, it's a very good flash, especially for your first attempt at a game. I hope my review encourages you to try even harder and do even better, because I really think you can make some NG Masterpieces if you work hard. Best of luck, mate!
-Commander Bentley