Despite your unwavering lack of self confidence, this was actually pretty interesting. I would love to see some progression in this story line, it has a lot of potential. An idea, you ought to introduce boy trouble into the plot. I know it wont be easy, but i would also like to see "the monster". This entire idea is interesting to me, and im glad i stumbled upon you and your video, so i decided to speak up and spread a little sunshine.
Reviews for "The Monster"
exninja123 responds:
Thanks!
You'll see more of "The Monster" in "The Other Side"
The only grammar thing I caught was, "I quetly sneaked away" should be "I quietly snuck away". The art is a great improvement, but I'd like some screens to be part text and part drawing (in a dynamic way). The music was really well chosen but the transitions were often too blatant, I prefer fading on everything when it's not a surprise moment. When it is a surprise moment there should be some other noise to end the music like a thunder clap or something. Try adding ambient noises in the future, like crowds rioting, a grandma laugh, a sound of the girl's power being released. Thanks for sharing and good job!
exninja123 responds:
Thank you!
And for the thoughtful review! :D
its ok, kind of interested in the other side story now.
exninja123 responds:
Thank you!
Hopefully I will make it soon! :)
Can't wait for the series!
exninja123 responds:
hehe, thanks! :D
The story culminated into the unintelligable and didn't explain anything very well. Also, your flash submission appears to be nothing more than a slide show. Your grammar needs improvement, but the art work was decent.
exninja123 responds:
yeah totally agree with you on that
thanks for the review! :)