Reviews for Rise of chaos episode 1

[Budj]

I gotta say this was pretty hard to watch. I'll try and critique as best I can without sounding like a royal prat :<.

First and for most write a proper story. This felt like you making it up as you were going along and it made no sense. Secondly, the images in the text boxes were ugly as sin, as were most of the sprites and the font you chose. You should never use Times New Roman font :<. The characters from animes, games etc and some fan-made characters just made this non-sensicle. It's like you're trying to add as many as possible, and the outcome is just... what is this? I couldn't even finish watching.

Interms of critique, all I can say is start smaller. WAY smaller! Learn some basics about animation, get an idea of how to write a compelling story and create characters that an audience can relate too/enjoy watching. If you are going to use sprites, keep the characters in character. Vegeta saying "I made a funny" felt awkward and out of place on so many levels, or even get someone to help you with writing. On the subject of the text boxes though, if possible you should bypass that entirely and just get voice actors. Text dialogue in Flash animations is so 2002, in this day and age good VA should be standard.

I will however give you one star because you are obviously still learning, but considering that there are so many movies like this on NG, this will just get swept up as being nothing special unfortunatly. If you want to make something that will get tons of views and a good score, you'll need to practice. Make shorter animations and try new things.

I don't mean to sound like an ass, you have potential! You just need to practice. :>

Punisher33 responds:

one. i did not make this up as i went a long. this i actually planned out. from beginning to end. are you a sprite person or a flash person. this was in no way played by ear. i'm not in anything on this site for popularity. i'm not like the goons that gotta make stuff involving popularity for being popular. in no way none of this stuff is stolen from anything unlike every one else where every one has to use tv jokes or anything. this is a well thought out story. you guys are so used to stories ending in fights. i'm giving something different. i'm bringing something fresh and new to this site. there is nothing crooked. you guys are spoiled by fight scenes. violence on this site is highly over rated. practice? I've pretty much perfected the animation. i recolored all my sprites for this. the only dumb ass move i made was with the walking animation instead of leaving it the way it was i cut out some things so it would fit. which was stupid right now. that i admit. i'm going to be recoloring sprites. the 3d work and everything is apart of my script. stuff like this real work. real animation process always gets over looked here due to the fact that people are used to popular stuff constantly being released.

[teejay-number13]

Now that I think about it, there's no way this would have worked if I hadn't fixed it for you. Most of the objects on your timeline were movieclips and they would have gone out of sync when you paused for the text boxes. You still haven't figured out the difference between a graphic and a movieclip.
Anyway, I was impressed by the 3D scene of Mavericks room. I think the credits last too long, and then they froze for some reason. Try just doing a 30 second clip of the song or something instead of trying to use it all. That will also help reduce your file size. I'm interested to see Chaos in action.

Punisher33 responds:

of course. i agree with that. i probably would have had errors the works. that's the reality of it. this thing has been going up and down all day today. chaos will be well worth it when he is finally. that's why the ones that were graphics i left as graphics and the ones i changed the movie clips where the ones with texts on it. because look at the clip i leaked i learned a huge lession from that.