Reviews for Papers

[Knuckstrike]

When I open up the flash I was surprised by the nice play button. To make the things around the play button in paper style is really nice.

I like the story and the main character. It was creative to make him like that. I think it would be worthwile to make a series out of that. That same creativeness was also in the cigarette he quickly came across, and the zombie worm that wanted money from him.

The graphics are good. The animation was really fluid, and I didn't notice any oddities. The paper guy himself is a bit too simple though. I liked that he had those hook hands and a bit of a rayman-style body, but the face and body are drawn too fast. It would look better if you could draw them with more detail. He had good facial expressions though.

In general I really like this animation. It's not amazing, and it's really short, but executed well.

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Surn responds:

Yeah, I was wondering about the face. I'll admit, the eyes look like they were drawn in MSPaint. If I do make a series I'll definitely have to refine the eyes (and hopefully nobody will notice). I'm glad you liked the cartoon, thanks for your input.

[shrimpchris]

This isn't too bad. I kind of like your style and I think that you could definitely make a series out of this with a bit of refinement.

The animation was good for the most part, but felt a little stiff at times (mostly the movement of papers). I liked the way you animated the cigarette. The movement of the cigarette was probably one of if not the most fluid moving thing here. (it did still feel a tad bit choppy though)

The facial expressions of papers were definitely good. I like how you managed to show how sad he was while still making it clear that he is an optimistic person. The lip sinc was decent as well, but I thought that the shapes his mouth made didn't always look right if you get what I mean. Like... His mouth looked like he was saying something different than what he was really saying.

The audio was good for the most part but, like the description says, squeakonia definitely has to go. I found it really annoying the first time I watched this. It wasn't so bad the second time, but it still bothered me. I liked the angry voice of the second dollar that papers had stolen from him. Its voice managed to be both funny and suiting. Papers had a great voice too. He sounded optimistic, yet broken and sad as well. Actually, he sounds like Bob from The Oblongs. Subtitles when the landlord was talking would've been nice too, but I was able to understand him, so no big deal.

Surn responds:

As requested, here's the rest of your review that you sent me:

"The backgrounds were nice as well. The background when Papers got mugged was decent but I really liked the Background aroung his home.

Overall, I reallly liked this for the most partand I definitely thik you should continue this.

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Also, while this did have a couple of slightly funny moments, I don't think it would count as a comedy movie in its current state. Too sad."

So, like several others, you would seem to agree that the overall work could use refinement and it's too depressing. I'm glad you enjoyed my cartoon, Thanks for your input.

[ZxEatTheEarthxZ]

I donâEUTMt understand where this went, I guess it could just be me (who doesnâEUTMt understand Flash videos) but Idk It seemed too.....âEUWho cares?âEU....

Depressing is fine, the animation is great, you definitely focused more on the Facial expressions then anything which is cool but your background is boring until the wind effects it. I would like to be pulled into this world a bit better i guess. Your also right about the audio, you need to make things more understandable but thats all.

I would like to see this, or the next one with all the improvements I was going to rate this a three but since youve already found some things that need to be fixed I admire this effort a bit more!

Surn responds:

I'll admit the background is a bit dull, but arguably that's what fits the theme of the cartoon. Still, there is still plenty of room for improvement in that area while still keeping it gloomy looking. Thanks for your input.

[Sectus]

Seemed like a rather depressing story all together. It was well done, mind you, but it was indeed rather depressing.

Animation / Graphics - This part was mild, and somewhat bland. Parts of it seemed too quickly done, and other parts seemed timed alright. I've honestly seen better animating, but this is definitely passable, and you clearly put in some effort to it, at least. You could try improving so that the animations have a more natural and flowing feel to them, so they won't seem clunky, too quick, or too slow.

Story - The story was sad, but well told despite that. It was a rather simplistic plot, so it could have been longer, and had more detail put into it. I honestly feel that this animation would have been more enjoyable should it have had a longer plot to it, and been longer in general. Don't get me wrong, the story was written nicely, but there are some aspects that could have been improved upon.

Audio - The audio was generally pretty basic. The music added a nice feel into the background to propel the sadness onward, and increased that feel during the events of the story as well. The voices could have had more feel to them however, and the main character's voice reminded me of something similar to Prostitute Mickey.

Overall - A well made flash on the whole. Obviously there are bits here and there that could have used a general second look, and improvements should have been made, but it is obviously that you are an at least generally talented animator, and I encourage you to continue, and to better yourself and your works along the way.

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Surn responds:

So in short the overall work needs polish, but was still pretty good. Thanks for your input.

[XwaynecoltX]

Entertaining flash

This was a clever movie you have here, There was some inspriring animation in this, and hile i do say that there was some areas of the flash that can be made to run and look better even more on a sharper and smoother feel, but i will for sure touch on those areas abit later, but now i just wanted to comment on how i preceived this to start off, and sofar i am pretty intriged by it, so glad to see something good here. Iguess theres alot of stuff happening to papers it was pretty entertaining but just wish something positive did come his way once in awhile. maybe in a future episode possibly, The main character did seem somewhat on the "SIMPLE" side of things but maybe thats something you could also enhance with some more detail. So to start off great work with the "EMOTION" of the characters you really expressed that well, and came off realisticly, that was something that stoodout for me, Lip synking was kind of off, the sound and mouth animation just didnt match up and vice versa, there was a time laps or something that just didnt match so thats something that could be worked on. The Story was actually notbad, just seemed kinda sad when all this stuff was going on and such, Graphics and visuals especially backrounds were kinda decent, Well here we come to an end of another flash, and with my closing comments on this, i had some entertaining fun and amusment with this movie, it was not great but was not poor either, it actually had some good points that kept me interested and wanting more, But with all that said sadly this review does come to an end and ill just say it was actually alright.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
There was some lip synking issues that could be smoothed out, You also may want to add some "SUBTITLES" in some areas of confusion with the sound of the voices, was not a big deal but subtitles would come in real hand in those lacking areas, so just another option to work on. and on a last note maybe abit more effort and detail on the character as it was just abit simplistic.