nice but...
its just too little. too little story, too little character development, or characters at all and too little time lengh. this would still be a problem even if this was a work in progress, because the newgrounds flash portal isnt the place to dump files or unfinished works.
other than than, this was fantastic looking, whent smoothly, and the timing was pretty spot-on. the voice acting was above-par, but could have been a little... more? i dunno.
good flash over-all, and i do hope to see some more lenghthy productions from you.