Needs Work
Many mistakes in your sentences. Rushed ending. Average/Poor flash. Some of the jokes are funny and some really aren't. In the end, it really needs work.
Needs Work
Many mistakes in your sentences. Rushed ending. Average/Poor flash. Some of the jokes are funny and some really aren't. In the end, it really needs work.
not bad. not bad at all.
Well the flash was about average, your jokes didn't make me laugh too much. I'll give you kudos on the ending though, that made me give you another star. So not too bad.