Intresting.....
I can see why there is a lot of confusion with the flash itself. Seeing that it was a comedy / drama., maybe it would of have just been better to head towards the comedy direction. That only because Armor Lock is seen as a joke now by a large part of the halo community rather than a move that requires skill. So if you really wanted to express more on the second part of the flash, then it may of have been better to just create 2 different flashes.
Another thing is that it seems that the second part of the flash was rushed out more than thought out. The more obvious one is the System failure scenes. Theres about 2 or 3 of them. So if his system failed then how did the armor lock manage to keep on going? Just one could of have been best. also what you could of done was after the power shutdown, you could of have simply removed the armor lock shield and just of have had the armor itself lock up like it did in halo 3 with 117.
Another thing that could of have been added was a PLAY or Start button at the start of the flash. I know that many people here start to load a flash and leave it loading while they go get a drink or take a piss. Well with your flash the flash just starts and once you come back well its already half way into the flash already and maybe its already at a main point of the flash and ruins it. So whats the point of seeing the flash anymore if you already kinda saw the ending.
Other than the animation and sound was well put. The move was also af a decent time span.