Tough One to Review
It's really hard for me to write a review for this piece. That is because of the effort, and keeping in mind it is your first flash. I'll start off with what didn't work for me. The "stick" art seemed like an easy way out. I'm thinking if you took some art classes and learned to draw in perspective, you could make your characters a lot more interesting to look at. I'm not a flash expert, but it seems like you used a lot of basic drawing tools for objects and backgrounds. This is something that will improve with experience. The sound really needs some work, as does the voice acting, which was hit or miss. What did work for me was the strong effort put into the plot, to make it something original. There were some good jokes in the piece. And you obviously care about your work. I suspect with more practice, and with more work, you'll become a better artist and you'll be able to find out if you have a talent for this media. It's hard to predict that, but overall, I think you're off to a good start.