Reviews for Mariokirby in action

[ChickenRamen]

you've got potential

here are some protips some of my favorite authors:
from Jay Naylor: map out your plot from begining to end especially when planning a long series. this is before you write your story, it allows you to keep the story coherent and flowing and allows you to properly forshadow (this is what makes epic multivolume novels so re-readable, the next time through small details you didn't notice so much the first time carry a weight and significance, and gives the story that finess/judo stuff since something small and belivable early on can have a better effect)
from Piers Anthony: write a character sheet for each character, what is their personality, what do they look like, what are their motivations, this allows your characters to be consistant, keep it updated, if the character is dynamic (they are influenced by some event, get mutilated, etc.) make a timeline for them noting when the event occured and have a sort of snapshot of what all was going on in the world when it happened (especially important when your story has multiple concurrent storylines)
that pizza roll dude from youtube: his name eludes me at the moment but he does awesome reviews of sci-fi flicks, he's famous for his Star Wars reviews, and they really are must watch because he shows how important plot and other factors are and it ties in similar advice to the two authors i mentioned and really drives home the importance of it all with examples.
i hope this helps, and i hope to see some great stuff from you as you learn the ropes.
good luck

07mariokirby responds:

Thanks for the tip =)

[galatea1]

For a first flash

It's not bad. You've got the sprites and the sound effects down; now you just need a good story to "hang it on". That's probably the best advice I can offer here. Keep it up!

07mariokirby responds:

Im sure I can think of a story to follow.
Thanks for the tip =)

[robtheslob9912]

I have some advice.

This type of flash is over used. Try coming up with something truly creative.

[depes7448]

Great first animation!

Develop a story for your mario kirby. Try to give all your characters different personalities so they all act differently and unexpectantly (even to you). Keep it up. You're going to be one of the top sprite animators in no time!

~Depes Crystalline~

07mariokirby responds:

I'll try my best =)

[MasaAndMune]

Pretty good start

All of the basics were covered pretty well, but a few suggestions.

Generally when working with sprites, you want to make sure that the sprites themselves will take up a good amount of space on the actual document size. So the sprites should be a bit bigger, instead of having all of the sprites so small compared to the actual bg even though I understand you were trying to go for that epic battle look.

You may want to try a higher fps rate since you're doing fighting and using a lot of blurring. Sprites tend not to look as good if you're doing blurring at a lower fps. I would suggest at least 24 fps if you're going to try for it.

When the ground is moving to show hes running fast, the far away background should also move as well to give a sense that hes moving with the scene, instead of just the ground moving.

But for your first flash its a good start.

Good job and keep up the good work.