Creepy piece
The music just makes this feel even creepier, nice work here.
Animation: Frame by frame piecing of a horrendous nightmare you're having, quite gloomy.
Audio: Rather fitting and melancholy.
Storyline: You keep having a weird nightmare with monsters and you have no teeth after awakening from a coma.
Overall: Quite creepy and good.
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Unique
I really like the style of this submission. Not only the drawings but the whole layout. Too bad the "Play" button didn't work, but I could read the comic by advancing the pages manually anyway.
I like the music you selected. Personally I found the "No / Tomo"-track (yeah, I hope that's how it's called, couldn't make it out too clearly) the most fitting for the comic as it adds a lot to the creepy/nightmarish atmosphere.
However, you should make the texts in the menu a bit bigger. Sometimes I had trouble reading it.
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The play button was supposed to replay animations that occurred in the comic,
however after thinking about it I'm deciding to not show the "animated" version of the comic until a later date.
Also yes the track was listed as no/tomo, the actual title is no tomorrow by Akira Yamaoka.
Thanks for the review!
- Celx
Creepy
I thought it was Ok and kind of original that it was a slideshow but the story was original too.
The art was OK but a bit too sketchy and a bit too dark but it was very fitting for this submission so it was fine for me. Too rough so I think you should round it a bit but the blood things were good too.
I was a bit disappointed that it wasn't really animation but there WAS some animation were the word boxes came out to make it less boring so I guess it's OK but could use a little bit more animation in some places.
Th story was original and very creepy so the story was good too but it was pretty creepy and I think you should make it a bit longer because it saw it in maybe a minute or two but the slideshow buttons worked fine and it is always nice to go back a couple of panels and see the artwork you put in it.
I think it needed a bit more effort into it since it was a slideshow and there was barely any animation but it will be OK just leaving it.
Overall it was pretty good and needed to be a bit longer and maybe get some better sketches into it and improve the artwork and try to fit the text in one place but I say the whole thing was a OK
Yes some of the artwork needs work...
Thanks for the review,
& try not to forget the R.R.C tag!
- Celx
Certainly an alternative comic
Well, the drawing style jumps about a bit, with the way that you've set it out into the unique style with the black background and relatively few colours for effect, you've really shown a great passion for the drawing and presentation of this piece.
Do you have a set page format for this that you could present on a website, for example. Try looking at how Giant in the Playground present their comics, because that might be a better way to look at how it all comes together - I'm not a fan of viewing comic strips in flash, more of reading them in the traditional format.
With the drawing style, I think that you could do with making the piece more unified with the drawing style - the doctor has the mad hair going for him, but he looks very differently drawn to the patient lying in the bed. Yes, the teeth missing don't help, but that's plot.
Certainly looking decent and I look forward to more.
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Yeah I've been trying to make the comic art style more consistent.
The thing is most of those drawings were done when I was seventeen, and I've just been tracing over them with my wacom.
I wanted to go against the traditional format, for a variety of reasons, but mostly so people could get a better view of the artwork.
Thanks,
- Celx
Seems incomplete
its a great story, i would prefer it to be a video than a slide show but its good anyway, the ending seems very incomplete though, anyway i cant wait to see the rest.
Hello,
It was meant to be a comic book, so I tried to keep to the spirit of my source material anyhow I am aware it's pretty short.
However unlike something like shark, these chapters will be released a lot quicker,
so everything will come together soon.
Thanks for the review!
Sincerely,
- Celx