hmm
pretty good, but the timing of the jokes isnt right, i only cracked smirks here and there
hmm
pretty good, but the timing of the jokes isnt right, i only cracked smirks here and there
Nice...
Part of life...I guess...great storyline :)
i like it
the idea is good but it needs refinement. the dialoge also. but its good overall. i hope it dont get blammed
Creative!
Maybe I shall see more of this in the future?
awesomeness
great