awww
the girlfriend left
Reviews for "The Future Wasn't There"
Okay, let's be honest.
If I'm going to have a girlfriend that hot, there's not a chance in HELL I'm going to ruin it by making a time machine. Unless I go back to get my past girlfriend to make out with my present girlfriend. Would they think that's weird?
Wait, if I remove the past girlfriend from her current timeline, wouldn't the future girlfriend cease to exist until the past girlfriend is returned? God damn, time travel is confusing.
Pretty cool
I thought it was nice. Alhough, the recycled animaions were quite noticeable. It makes it look like you weren't trying. I love the fact that it had some originality compared to most of the stuff that's put up in the front page.
Also, as much as I like it, it's a tad bit predictable about what's going to happen. Usually when a movie has an, "To be continued." There's alot of plots that may confuse the viewer of what migh happen next.
Ending Not Suiting
I agree with a previous reviewer. Telling us to write our own ending rarely works in printed fiction and it does not, in my opinion work with this flash. It seems like you're building up both with the music and plot a theme of "don't take things for granted".
Using the kind of ending you used robs the viewer of a real conclusion. You could say it's experimental, but I don't see enough evidence within the flash to suggest that we're supposed to draw our own conclusions from this.
Any ending whether redeeming (creating some kind of time paradox) or sad (death) would have been better than the one presented in this flash. It seemed to me like you chopped off the story at the rising action, not actually reaching the climax of the plot.
Hmmmm...
This flash is a decent piece of work. Might I suggest spending more time on the music selection, what you have is a bit dull and sometimes overused. Also the ending... I'm going to say that the guy is dead due to the sudden music cut-off followed by staring at a smoking crater for a sec too long... The confusing ending detracts from the grand total.
You only get one chance at life perhaps??