Sweet! This looks good :3
I think there should at least be some color though.
I do like the sketchy quick style, but some of it gets too sketchy at times, to the point where it feels really rushed. Anyways the story looks interesting and you obviously have oodles of drawing talent, so I hope to see episode 2 (or anything by you, for that matter) in the future. :P
Hey, thanks sefyz. =)
I get the 'you should add color' thing a LOT, and my drawings definitely are sketchy. A lot of them are drawn really fast so that I can crank out story pretty quickly, and I try to call it a 'stylistic' kind of thing.
The truth is, when I draw really really detailed and everything even though it is really fun, to me personally, it gets really stressful trying to tell the story. The reason is that having that ''standard'' throughout the entire course of the novels I want to tell gets stressful, due to me seeing and calculating that I may have to take about 10 years if it IS colored to finish the entire thing altogether (I do have a huge story that I want to ''get out to the world'').
If it were going to be just 10 chapters long, it might be fine, but I'm planning on gettings hundreds out. :-)
Thanks again for the review sefyz.
interesting
this story was good enough to keep me interested...but being the kind of artist that doesn't pay attention to perfection will kind of hurt your ratings...if you cleaned this up and added color then you'd be in bussiness....I hope to see more of this story since it is "interesting"...
Thanks for the review. :-)
I see what you mean with the color. Everyone here at newgrounds is really amazing and everything, so by comparison it's like I've been drafted to high school while I'm still an elementary student (and art wise, I really am an elementary student XD). I'm meaning to color it, just not until I get a lot more parts out and really get the story down.
Thanks again for the review.
Looks good
Granted its only in the planning stage, but thats a really great step alot of animators dont go through.
Things to work on would be with voice acting
>>The timing - alot of long pauses in-between makes stuff sound unnatural and awkward
>>The emotion - Put more feeling into it.
(although that stuff may be that way since its only in planning)
I look forward to this. Good luck
Thanks for the review hawkmuffinz. :-)
The next clip (Chapter 1) will be interactive. I thought that the timing was set to kind of be like broken saints (I THINK that's the name of it...) or those Tokyopop iMangas. I'll still take note of it. It's something I should pay attention to in the future, as maybe just MAYBE if the timing is put shorter it'll sound more natural.
The emotion, visually...hmm...I'm still new at this whole art thing as crazy as it may sound. XD I'll do my best.
Thanks again for the review. =)
Looks promising.
I liked the submission, shows a lot of promise for future releases. As with others I hope that the artistic side of the animation was rough for the demo, in a few scenes the drawing looks quite promising for a polished version. I look forward to seeing more, keep up the good work. ^_^
Thanks for the review, Xanthic. =)
I'm going to be releasing a lot of story to make up for the sketchy artwork.
Thanks again for watching.
Not bad, just needs a little work
This really wasn't that bad at all. The music set the perfect mood for the piece, the dialogue was decent, and the story seemed interesting enough (I'd watch the next video in the series, at the very least). The art was my biggest concern. Some images were very clear and beautifully drawn, but some of the others left a lot to be desired, particularly during the action scenes where it was difficult to tell what was happening. I did enjoy the fact that it was a simple black on white, though... it seemed to create the effect you were going for, and I'm sure the use of color would have ultimately proven to be a distraction.
You have room for improvement, and that's why I put my rating a little on the low side: I want to be able to rate the future installments as being better than this one (which I truly hope they will be).