nice
I like the idea and the style of this animation. Yeah, just change the your to "you're" like everybody said, also a bit of colour would be cool, Like colour the background or make the newgrounds store part stand out more. I still like the pencil-like style of the animation too. My favourite part is when it shows the tankman with the NG T-shirt on.
As for that review by "Deomas". I don't think he read Tom's post, I think the "our" should be kept there.