Reviews for Chocolate Cake

[Lazarou]

Cute

It wasn't as bad as people are making out.

The main problem is that the poem it is based on is really bad.

I think considering the plot you had to work with was pretty cruddy, you did a fairly decent job.

things to note for future reference:
-Whilst it is easier to animate people made of geometric shapes, they look incredibly fake. Try to soften the shapes, if in doubt trace around a photo and then break it into seperate MCs to animate each joint.

-The sound effect of eating the cake sounded a little bit like, well, something very rude. Some more obvious chomping and scoffing noises would be better than the current slimy, sloppy noise you have.

Keep up the hard work, its obvious that your knowledge of flash is increasing with each movie you make.

andy70707 responds:

thanks, I still have another day, so I might get rid of the outlines around the joints in the people and soften them up, like you said.

[Zeppelin562]

uhh

that was fucking creepy. the animation was pretty bad too

andy70707 responds:

lol, I suppose the faces and limbs do look kind of creepy

[captincroc]

Simple

A fairly simple and basic cartoon. Its clear that your sounds are okay but character design and animation isn't perhaps that is something you should practise on flash but other then that its quite good. I wish good luck fgor the future.

~Andy

andy70707 responds:

thanks, I didn't do my absolute best on the animation, but I spent pretty long on the graphics and ages on the walk cycle (I cant use the bones tool in CS4 unless I use AS3, so I had to FBF it) Its also my first walk cycle I think.

[Einheriar]

Aaaaa

gross eating noises

andy70707 responds:

lol, I recorded that myself of me eating some sweets

[Jackoginger]

Its a start, an interesting one

You have added sound, though, improving your animation skills and graphics should be your next step. For example, when he walked, he would walk one step back, probably to do with how you done it on the timeline. The graphics werent that great, though, practice will make it better over time. Another should be shaping the cake so its not as big as two heads put together, how the guy in the animation eat that I have no idea, I'll give him that. Sound and speech should match the animation, so, more dramatic, as the speech was a bit unclear in some parts.

It wasnt that good but it had an interesting and 'cute' plot, as Lazarou put it. 2/10.

andy70707 responds:

umm, that pretty much summs it up. Some parts I really CBA to animate, like them eating. I didnt really think about the size of stuff, but its not the worst thing.