Interesting
I hate it when chicks just offer to have sex with me in order to get out of annoying situations. However, if one chick offered, I probably would have ended my search there.
The comedy was good, and the voice acting wasn't half-bad. But some parts seemed like the audio cut off abruptly, or a previous sound clip would blurt in then stop.
Still, overall, pretty darn good.
I'll keep that in mind and not cut the audio abruptly. It usually happens when a VA drags out a word and I can't see the waveform so I just cut the audio thinking that the recording it over. Anyways thanks for the suggestion will definitely take it into consideration.
A solid animation
not bad at all, but it needs a lot of work. The narrator was not very exciting at all. The bland story-telling made it very hard to stay interested in what he was saying. There was no real character so you didn't care if he got laid. He didn't seem like a smooth lady's man or a complete loser, just a normal dude.
there wasn't much of a storyline and no real plot twists or surprises or actual events. sorry to say but the whole thing probably could have been cut down to under a minute. The delivery of the actors was very unconvincing. It isn't for them to improve, it is more of a nudge to direct a little more. As far as comedy went, it was weak and needed a more structured story so you could really get into some punching jokes.
The art style was alright, but again, it sort of matched the bland narration, there was no real animation involved. The doodles on the wall at one point made me wish the whole thing was drawn like that with some more life and frame by frame instead of constant tweens and nothing but lip sync. When they turned and they swiveled, I really was a little turned off.
Overall, a good animation, fair performance, but needs more excitement and push. The script was the real fault in this though in my opinion. Good luck on your future animations.
Thanks for the review, l appreciate the honesty; however Narrator is actually just a normal guy, but I see where your coming from. Looking over my script there was really just dialogue after dialogue with very little direction on what the voice actors/actresses needed to deliver, which is why character didn't feel like they were interacting with each other as much. I should added more voice direction in the script.
Anyways appreciate the constructive criticism, I'll keep these in mind.
its awesome but not my cup of tea
it was good, but didn't really catch my fancy
I'm glad you didn't hate the movie.
Improvements to be made.
I totally aggre with MysticShinHanKu. Everything seemed a little too forced and quite bland. I had to force myself to watch it all, hoping that you would sneak in something really funny but it never really happened - at least not for me.
Someone may have mentioned this already too but there were a few spelling mistakes in the subtitles. Have people proof read your work before you post it - I know how silly you can feel from silly spelling mistakes, trust me.
Keep at it though and well done for completing another project.
Actually, I completely overlooked the spelling, I did proofread some of the subtitles, but when it started getting close to the release of the movie I stopped proofreading. I go through and fix all the bugs in my animation, but I need to go through and check for spelling. Thanks for your review
Some funny parts, but...
The pickup lines are really funny, as is the ending, but the rest is just meh. Those parts and the extra deleted pickup lines make it work seeing, though!
Good thing I put them in. Thanks for the review :D