Pretty cool.
My only constructive criticism is that the walk cycle from the side view on the main character is a little weird. It's obscured by his cloak, but it looks like he's lifting his knees forward with each step without extending his lower legs forward to touch the ground. People don't typically bring their knee any farther forward than the step that they're taking, so it looks unnatural.
Very nice!
This is well done, period -- not well done for a first Flash, but it is very, very good. What I like about it is that you maintained the dream-like quality through the visuals through better than average animation. You didn't reply extensively on tweens, but mixed it with frame-by-frame work that makes this piece shine.
I also like how you chose a different subject matter, and avoided some cliches and subverted tropes as well. As a result, even if I am not sure of the deeper meaning of this dream, I can follow the story that is told, an original story that is open-ended enough for the viewer to intepret. It's a wonderful change from being drawn by an author's derivative narrative.
My biggest criticism is that the sound quality is a bit low. That and there are some points, such as when our protaginist is extending his hand, that the visuals aren't as well composed as in the rest of the short movie. Nevertheless, this is a good Flash entry.
Nicely done
Since you're asking for constructive criticism I'll try as a viewer to give you my opinion on what you might work on.
First of all... avoid making simple mistakes such as the scene when the black blob spits out those red feathers. The protagonist at first draws out his LEFT arm and then, in the next scene... he catches the feathers with his RIGHT hand.
Second thing. The black blob was done pretty well. It had a good 'fluid' motion to it and all, but the protagonist, on the other hand, seemed a bit too stiff.
Third and last thing. The cape of the protagonist MUST be done better since it's practically the character's main garnment. Being a serious character you should also work on improving the expression (and 'depth') of his eyes. Needless to say that by increasing the quality and detail of your characters you'll increase the viewer's interest towards them.
Story-wise, I have a feeling you won't have problems. Due to the abstract nature of this flash things worked out fine, but make sure to add a preface for future ones.
Keep up the good work.
(btw, have you been influenced by Naruto anime in your flash?)
Oh wow, I didn't even notice the hand thing! Thanks! I agree that the cape has to flow better, but I just didn't know exactly how a cape flows so I did the best I could from mental imaging. Thanks for the Review though! :D
Good!
It's very good for the first time! Ilike how you made this black thing. Trane for making your charecter moves, and it'll be perfect!
Not bad for a 1st...
Not bad for a first flash my friend.
Suggestions:
1. Possibly change the music as the tone or atmosphere of your flash changes.
2. Maybe try adding a back story to the flash? It all depends on where you want to go with it, but sometimes it is good to see where a character has come from or why everything is happening.
I will probably add back story for my future flashes. This was a dream though, and I didn't come into the story before you press the play button, so I didn't know much other then what I saw.