Choppy.
Now, this is an amazing video with good animations and great voice acting, but I feel you need more of a story, and even though I know you said you had a high frame rate, it still seemed kind of choppy. If you need help with the story, PM me, I am a great writer.
I'm fine, the story is fine. You can't judge a story by one part of an episode. Considering that I'm a writer and have written 4 books, the first one in the process of publishing. This is also one part of 3 parts for the second episode.......so yeah, you can't judge a story from a single segment.
I appreciate the offer, but again you can't judge a story that focuses on development by one section. It's like reading a chapter in a novel without reading to see how everything is developed and then say that the novel doesn't have a good story.
Pretty good
This is a pretty good flash considering that it was done untrained. I don't feel as confident as you are about doing flash without taking a crash course in a class,but I do believe you made a good start towards perfection. All it takes is time and practice no matter how much you know of the subject. It is alittle sketchy and the frame rate is a bit choppy which lead to remind me of Gundam Wing a bit. Making a flash on novels is a nice idea. Everything else can always be worked and it'll only get better.
Good luck, I'll be looking forward to seeing the next episode. :-)
Beginning
Its starts so slow its almost slow as the real Gundam Seed series
Awesome!
Amazing story and nice visuals, I see a lot in the future of this story.As for the movie, I suggest you use a bit more background music, I mean, it gives a pace to the story as well as a mood, Plus it gives more ejoyable results.
PS
please give us more
It good enough to deserve a remake.
Nice script, I'm no fan of mecha, but that doesn't affect my review.
I think the major problem is the drawings. While being better than most of what you'll find around, it does take away from the story itself, which has a potential to go professional bigger than a number of famous animations. Sometimes their lines seem more dramatic than the situation being represented on screen, and the special effects deserve more attention. Also, focus on the facial expressions, as you're strongly inclined to drama in this piece. Study the camera positions as well.
Sometimes I feel like a voice actor didn't get the spirit of a particular line, and that affects my overall satisfaction with the movie. Still. the voices are quite good as a whole.
Another big problem are the audio. In a piece like this one, I would prefer to have an ambient audio all along, following the mood of the current scene. Silence should be used moderately. Also, the sound effects appear quite weak in the awkward silence.
I understand your limitations of filesize, but I'd rather have even shorter parts so that you can make something even better.
Keep drawing!