Nice First Submission
Wow. That's impressive. Most first submissions are stickfights, suicides, or sprite loops, but this was a full length animation. Nice directing and editing between clips, there definitely is a keen eye in there.
Some suggestions, work a bit on your flash drawing, it was great for an early project (again, stick fight) but will need something else to it later on. I had difficulty identifying Dr Breen at the end there (it was Breen right?), other than that the characters were easy identify. This one might be my slow computer, but try to find a longer lasting song/loop next time so the animation and music end together, unless another song comes in to takes it places.
I think we're going hear more out of Sylar116,
Loti.