could be better..
not a lot happened.
i couldn't really tell what was being said so work on the audio.
the intro i felt dragged on and the voice over was irritating.
i read through the intro and it caught my attention but it felt like a let down in my opinion.
also the guy doesn't walk or nothing, the ship just stood in 1 spot even though the thrusters were blatantly burning, that didn't make any sense..
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Please check out my latest chapter, chapter 4. it is getting better
same thing?
As I've said before, if the Americans are going for an all-out assault, then they don't need a recon. The voice was weird and needs changing, and the movement of the astronaut was way off, needs a lot more work and maybe you could combine the movies since they are so short.
you have seen nothing yet. check out chapter 3, it's bigger, badder and better than before
More Ideas for improvement:
Animation: Never ever ever skew a character to try to show he's walking. NEVER! What your going to have to do is a frame by frame (fbf). You need to draw a walk cycle for your character, where at each frame his arms and legs change at each frame. There are some great tutorials on Newgrounds to help you with this admittedly time consuming and difficult process. If you want I can send you some of my fbf walk and run cycles to give you a better idea. On a positive note when your spaceman gets attacked the animation is decent. I think you did this through shape tweening, to really make the attack look good your going to have to fbf the rapidly explanding drops of goo too. I know this all sounds like a lot of work, but excellent, even okay animation is an insane amount of work. But it's rewarding in the end, at least sometimes it is...
Artwork: Not bad, the background of the planet would benefit from a lot more detail. Also I would have felt so much better about the spaceship if you had given a landing gear or something.
Sound: The voice acting in the beginning was so annoyingly slow! I'll get to how I feel about your long text in a minute but if your going to make us sit through it, please don't make it so slow. I was dying listening him say Con...tin...uuuueeeeeessssss... Also the sound effects aside from the voice acting were clearly you making the noises of the sound effects. There's other websites which you should look into with copyright free sound effects I can send them to you too if you'd like. The music is pretty good for the mood though.
Plot: Wait... the ship didn't actually land in the last episode, but now your narrating that it did? I know a landing sequence would be hard to draw but you can't forever narrate the harder to draw scenes, start taking risks! Try to draw things your not totally uncomfortable with. You can only improve! But, yeah, as other reviewers stated, making us sit through the long refreshers is not so cool, and seems like a way to spread out a short movie. I would make this optional, or simply say in your author comments to please watch the other movies before watching this one. Do not use this text as a way of extending the length of your movie and covering for your harder to draw scenes.
Overall: Again wayyyy to short. On the plus side, your artwork is improving an the story continues to be intresting.
thanks friend. well noted, and i will improve along the way. thanks for the review, i also reviewed some of your movies
Hmm
The idea is good and interesting, however, you should make the guy actually move instead of skewing him, and overall work on the graphics better. Still really short though, overall 6.
thanks for the review kind sir
interesting
interesting interpretation
Thank you. Check out Chapter 3. It is just out. Thank you again
-Jaiba