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A few things I can suggest. If it's music, and the story you're telling has something to do with war/battle/military, needs a drum line. Mainly snares. I would also suggest making the bass drum less repetitive, and add in a few tom hits. You could also try a key change! works best at a moment where you feel the feeling/emotion/PASSION couldn't get any stronger. I've got a bad ear for notes so I can't tell you which key to change it to, but definitely go up! One thing songs like this always need is to keep changing it up. like instead of repeating the pattern again, have the strings quiet down and the winds take over, then key change up with piano and single violin leading, then cut off and just the brass.
I don't know if you have the software to acknowledge those suggestions and keep it sounding beautiful, but it's worth a shot right?
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