Good flash!
Hahaha I like the begining poem this flash its very original.
Good work!
Reviews for "The Beelion"
blackcat2000 responds:
Thanks... Originally the Beelion was gonna appear in one of my Frame by frames, but I figured the wings needed to be a symbol, which wouldn't suit... Then I started drawing prototypes for it, then made it hover. Then I made the simple background and trees and rocks and stuff. Then I decided to write the poem :P
Thanks for the review!
Pretty Good!
Nice and smooth, good concept and good animation as well. The only thing I can think of that needs improving in this would be the graphics, more shading, more detail, other than that everything looks great, keep it going!
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blackcat2000 responds:
Indeed... I tried to put more effort into drawing things, but I'm gonna need more to make it even better. Shading is definitely needed, so thanks for the review! :)
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A quite nice flash with a good poem and a funny ending.
I liked the fact that you made use of subtitles here. That way it's much easier to understand the "narrator". Speaking of the narrator: The sound quality is a bit lacking while you're reading the poem. As if you were sitting in a box or something like this...
Also, while you are reading the poem there isn't much happening on the screen. Just the beelion flying and flying and flying... you should add something more to it, like some funny stuff that is happening in the background.
The ending is a bit confusing for me. What was going on there? What are those creatures the beelion is eating there?
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blackcat2000 responds:
Subtitles, I figured were necessary, as I noticed I *cough* I mean the narrator *cough* said some things wrong... like "snide" :P The sound quality... it's probably because i was recording it in the box... known as my room.
As for things in the background, how? Why? I mean... I didn't put anything? That's a brilliant idea, and i hate myself for not thinking of it ;) I must've been distracted with distorting sounds and other animations... heh... *Spoilers ahead! :O*
The ending... I had this awesome idea for making a short track, and flipping between pictures, so I did it. And I thought of the ideas on the spot. Whatever it was, basically the monsters get pwnt, and the beelion gets the trophy... so... yeah... that's the story :P
Thanks for da review!
Pretty enjoyable
This is a funny movie mainly as it gets better ,the longer you watch it. At first ,i thought that the graphics were not to good, but as it played out they improved vastly. This was about the time the purple, thing came into play. I thought at first that this was a loop ,but that was the bee flying. On second viewing this made more sence and i understood the plot i think. I liked the song it was catchy and fun, i did feel no offense that the narration voice did not go with the movie .I dont know why but this is a good movie nice scenes and an interesting plot.
blackcat2000 responds:
Ooh! It's as if the undecodable got decoded!
It's good to know... My main fear was that people would think that the song didn't end and would close the movie, and not watch the ending. A little random, but my first semi-real attempt at a story-line. Thanks for the review :)
Needs more.
This isn't that bad a movie, to be honest. (Sorry, that pun was bad)
I would consider getting better audio equipment, as the sound had a bit of an echo. It might just mean that you have to be a little closer to the mic.
The animation loop was what let it down. The nice little interlude with the purple alien fellow was nice, but I had to stop watching it after you went all Lion King on us. I had really lost interest from that point, sorry.
The Dr. Seuss style poem was nice - was it actually the great Doc, or did you write that yourself? I'd suggest that you study reading poetry, as you keep pausing in the wrong places though.
With effort, this could become great. It will be tough, but I think you've got what it takes.
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blackcat2000 responds:
Hmm... If I remember correctly, the echo was on purpose... but yeah, the quality isn't as awesome as it could be. And you missed the awesome part where the Beelion got a trophy!
I wrote it myself, and to be honest, if i paused at the wrong times, it was because I had wrote the poem in a book, then put it on flash. Then I had to get the timings right, so the pauses were mostly due to the flash taking a little longer/shorter... I think I can fix that, when I'm not lazy ;)
Thanks for the review! :)