Not a good demo at all
Look, if you want to build suspense for your upcomming work, here a few things you need to do: 1) make it longer 2) other than the seemingly blatant rip of texas chainsaw(yes, I could see him, even if it was the screen for a sec) give us something more to chew on, cause we will forget that you put this up in the first place. and 3) Use spell check please. Nothing takes away from getting into a story than stopping what you're reading to notice obvious spelling errors. Im only giving you my critique so that you may make this better, im not ripping on you.