Cool!
You've got some great stuff going on here! Your orchestration leads to an epic sort of sound, especially with the choir toward the beginning, ostinato bass lines, and brass. I liked the change of pace when the drum set came in.
My constructive criticism:
You have a piece of music that is over nine minutes here. In the age of television and infinite 30 second commercials though, the average listener's attention span is going to be far below that. In order to not lose people's attentions, an important principle should be kept in mind- the longer a piece of music is, the more structured it needs to be in order to make logical sense and keep the attention of the listener. Musical form is a study in and of istelf, but this can mean developing a theme and bringing it back every so often to provide your audience with something familiar which to grab hold of. It also means creating variety- a lot of the texture in this is very similar throughout. Try using a bit of counterpoint, changing these range that the melody is being played in, etc.
My other constructive criticism would be to pay more attention to phrasing. You have logical notes and rhythms here, but you need to make it musical in order to really touch a person emotionally. Have you instruments crescendo up to the top of a phrase and decrescendo back down. Use some tempo changes to keep the music from being too rigid. Tweak velocities to make the instruments sound more human and realistic. All of these little details take a long time, but they add a heck of a lot in making an amazing result. They are what make a piece go beyond 'cool' and into 'emotionally powerful.'
I really dig what you have going here and hope that you keep creating music. Keep it up!
5/5 and 9/10
Trevor Crookston (BlazingDragon)