coolish
well, i liked the style of the animation, but i found it kinda random how the dude just came up and killed the kid, but then again it may only seem random because i don't have the whole backstory...
Reviews for "This Wall"
DemonPrototype01 responds:
Thank you for considering that there is more than I have shown. This is true. I just wanted to put this out there to see a general reaction.
Needs a bit of work.
This could be taken as a serious concept, but there need to be a few tweaks.
For one, the animation is a bit awkward. Yes, the art is fine, but the actual animating seems a bit sketchy.
And, to be honest, there is no real reason to submit just a work in progress to the actual site. That's what the NG Alphas section in NG.Mag is for.
DemonPrototype01 responds:
Ah, thank you for this information. I honestly was not aware of NG Alpha nor NGMag.
The reason to submit the work in progress was to catch errors and tasks that would be overwhelming to go back and fix. the sketchy animation was done on purpose, but probably just looks like I did it wrong, I bet.
suggestion box:
If you are going to resubmit even if this doesn't make it through the portal, I would like to suggest slowing down the pedestrian animation just a bit (it migh add some length to your flash.) Try cutting to different angles, switch between 3rd and 1st person view for example, and for obvious reason all be it kinda cliche, try using Pink Floyd for the background music. I'll assume I don't have to spell out which song of theirs to use. Lastly, how 'bout some sort of graffiti on the wall?
(by the way, the "boy" looks more like a girl. go with it maybe? it could work.)
hope things work out.
DemonPrototype01 responds:
I refuse to use copyrighted music, even though the mood would fit. It's a good idea. There's reasons for every aspect of this animation, which no one has considered at all. The wall is massive and bleak. The masked people are efficient. The boy is just a multipurpose child.
Thank you for actually writing a thoughtful review, though.
hahahahahhaha
oh man this is so funny.... seriously no its not.
however you could make it so brill. try adding sound and stuff innit
OK.
I think this could be taken seriously if you finish it. Add the sounds you think would fit, the sounds give greater understanding of what is going on in your movie. The character is well drawn and the animation for the most part is smooth. Keep working on it. Shot me a letter when you finish it up. I would like to see how it turns out.