Short
It took forever to load, and other than the poetry, there wasn't very much to it. Previous critiques say it was cliche, and that is true, but sometimes that happens in a non-profit amateur work. That sounds harsher than it is, but in any case, it could easily have been more original simply by changing the anime-style eyes.
And in all honesty, that lolita shit has me trained to view someone in that garb as a deviant first and a little girl second.
Ultimately, if it were a little more comical or satirical, it could have the interest of things like Lenore. Good artwork, decent poetry, didn't like the anime influences or the length.