Try Again
Though i can see some actual effort, heres some... suggestions.
Stop tweening EVERYTHING, it has its use but its not all powerfull.
Add music, its not that hard.
Make a plot that is understandable.
Take more time on your drawings.
Add a loading screen if not a preloader.
Im not sure if this was supposed to be catagorized in, its niether funny not action nor a lot of anything else but random scenes that have no correlation to the last one.