hmmm...
bye the video i see u dont like runescape, and by the drawing ur a good drawer, but not good at the storyboard and it looks like ur an axstrack drawer, its not offence, astract drawer means that u draw strange thinks or thinks un real of ur imagination, but was a bit strange the video, in resume i say:
-keep trying, put more sounds, voices, title, credit, and narration, and the most important think allways keep drawing thats my tips for u.