Reviews for A Dramatic Scene

[FairSquare]

Ok, this is just awesome!

Seriously, this might be my favorite song (made by you) ever! :D
A flash should be made around this song. It's just so.. storytelling.
Storytelling? Yes, this song tells a story but with music instead of words.
And because everyone has a different imagination and stuff, everyone will interpret this song different and different stories will be told to them.
But of course, this song is not perfect. I did hear a few things that could be a bit better (in my opinion), like the guitary synth thing.. at 00:37 it plays a melody but the dynamics of that melody sound a bit weird. I mean, it's not like it's playing softer, but like the guitarist decided to run away like a mad man to continue his playing a half a mile from the listener. And he took his amp with him.
And the drums could be a bit more in the background too, at some places.
But, those are just minor flaws.
Anyway, story time.

''Come with me. Don't be scared, it just a building.''
Harry tried to convince Laura to go through the enormous doors that were in right in front of them.
The building that they were about to enter, was a giant castle located just outside of a tiny village.
The villagers said that the castle was pure evil and that nobody dared going near it. They didn't even know who owned it and if somebody lived there or not.
But Harry wanted to investigate it and got his friend Laura to come with him.

''Well.. alright. If you go first, i'll follow.''
Laura was convinced.
Harry grabbed her hand. Not because he was scared she wouldn't come with him, but because he was frightened himself.
Slowly Harry and Laura pushed the doors open. They were unlocked, like expected.
When they were through the doors they could see that they were in a gigantic hall. They could see this, because of the ray of light that shined through the opening of the doors.
Amazed and impressed they looked around them while they were still walking forward. They were away from the doors now and..
they closed with a bang.
Laura began to scream, but Harry who remained somewhat calm silenced her by putting his hand over her mouth.
''Calm down'' he whispered. And Laura calmed down.
There was no light coming in the room. There were no windows and no other openings. It was pitch black.
They heard something. It sounded like soft footsteps. But they got louder and louder.
Harry grabbed Laura and ran with her towards the door, but the door was closer than they thought and smacked into it. Surprisingly, they didn't fall.
Meanwhile, the sound of the footsteps was getting really loud know. The owner of the feet that produced the sound was not far away from them and both could feel and evil presence.
Laura and Harry held each other, preparing for the worst.. whatever that might be.
The footsteps stopped and a low, hair rising laugh filled the room.
Harry nor Laura could make a sound.
Suddenly they heard the sound of a blade, swooshing through the air and..
Laura was hit on her head. She died instantly and Harry felt disbelief, anger, sadness and an immense fear at the same time.
The complete darkness was a good thing now, because if Harry could've seen Laura he would have fainted.
Another swooshing sound.
Harry duct and heard the sword shattering the wooden door.
Knowing there was nothing left he could do, he ran as fast as he could in the direction the sword came from. With a great force he knocked over a person and both fell to the ground. But Harry managed to land on top of this evil monster and hit it as hard a he could. He felt he was killing it.
Fortunately, the creature which he was hitting didn't have any swords left, or Harry would've been stabbed to death.
But before Harry could kill it, the doors swung open. The light revealed a person, but it's face was blank. The only things in the face were two dark red eyes.
Harry got up and ran through the doors, which slammed shut behind him.
It was raining outside now and it had became quite cloudy too.
Harry ran away until he was at a safe distance and fell to his knees, crying loudly and screaming.
''LAURA!''

It was a dramatic scene.

I am all out of ch

alternativesolution responds:

Now I know what you meant when you said your fingers were sore :P Oh Mr. FairSquare I cannot tell you how much I appreciate this review. This is exactly why I created this! :D I am so glad that you could imagine a scene to it!! Your story...it is so so scary and dramatic :'( Anyway, I'll message you about specific improvements later. Now all I can say is, thank you thank thank youuuuuu~! :D

[CaveStoryGrounds]

5/5 Rating

Well it appears I have been beaten to saying that this song holds a story. What that is exactly, is up to one's imagination.

This fine piece of music rings a story out of me that would go along the lines of a brief overlook of an underwater facility and ground-to-space cannon which would fire at 0:20. The round or laser would make its way into the midst of a war in space. Space ships would fire back and forth trying to take control of a planet in turmoil.

Anyway, I must comment on the song more then the story is may speak of. I really enjoyed this piece because it's action packed but felt suspenseful. It started off with a calm feel and quickly raised itself into a great guitar beat. However the shifts between different beats could have been slightly smoother I still think it all worked well together. I would say that this song was both ambient, and rock alongside some well articulated bass. This song has structure, and it should not go unnoticed by any means.

I really hope song gets heard by a good artist and animator(s) because the stories it can make could work for some truly amazing submissions here on Newgrounds, and possibly elsewhere. You did not disappoint in this wonderful three minute craft of a melody.

Hope to see more content like this, from you. Keep up the good work!

alternativesolution responds:

Ah, the images and critique, and (yes!) praise! :P I'm happy you like it! As for your last line, well, I think I shall create more of this then. Thanks so, so much for your time and words! :)

[spartan1338]

certainly a dramatic scene with a real story! mine

1338 walking in a room in an underwater base
Lanov (elite Zealot): "you have some nerve coming back here"
38 just stares at him energy sword in hand gun in holster "Talk is cheap"
Lanov "I agree! Actions speak louder than words!"
0:20
blades ignite, 38 and Lanov charge at each other and attack!
01:41
both tired
38 "you're better than I thought, lasting this long takes guts and skill!"
Lanov: "SHUT UP!"
they stair at each other until track loops and gets back to 0:21 when they get back to fighting in what is now a flooding underwater base due to UNSC reinforcements arriving and starting a fight above the water (a UNSC shot missed and hit a glass panel)
they keep fighting until 1:41 again when this time 38 defeats Lanov (sparing his life- W00T) 38 swims down further into the base to exit and then swims to the surface.
38 "This is not his grave but fate will make it someday....."
To be continued!-or something.
sorry it's shorter than the other I often search newgrounds for numerous songs to create one big idea to make a 4 part- sometimes 5 part story for a site other than newgrounds for ideas to make one 4 part- sometimes 5 part story on a site other than newgrounds. :(

i'll give a URL in message form if you wish.

alternativesolution responds:

Great! Thanks for listening!

[Knoxius]

Starring Keanu Reeves.

Could use some higher quality synths, but I can totally understand any issues finding the right ones. I really enjoyed the sporadic feel of this song, yet still a solid idea is conveyed. I got some great imagery listening to this. You definitely did a great job here!

alternativesolution responds:

Haha, glad you were able to get some imagery from it! Thanks for commenting! :)

[AndrewRG]

Almost sounds James Bond-ish. I love your drums/rhythm, and agree that it would benefit from better synths/samples. I picture some sort of get-away scene here, or maybe some sort of "investigation montage". Fairly good musicianship; me likes!

R4R

alternativesolution responds:

Ooh, thank you :D Your input is appreciated.