very good job, especialy on the sound
i watch Outlaw Star alot, so i have to say you did an absolute awsome job of getting the theme song right!
you also did a good job on setting up the sercumstance in witch aisha get's, well... fucked.
the ending was cool to, even though it wasn't complete, aisha's expresion was great!
Where Jim came from idk, but otherwise this was the best aisha hentai i've seen.