Too long
With a little experience, your animation and art will get better-
One thing I think you should work on is the length. There were a lot of unneccesary scenes, and the voice actors talked way to slow. Add in some subtitles and speak faster. Jokes can come out faster, too. Quicker jokes keep the audience laughing. It was a pretty good script overall, though, just try not to make it so long that we lose interest.
Awesome
I could see from the prelaoder, yor drawing skills are above average, i enjoyed this flash because i have tried to make many of this kind before, failing them all, they all looked stupid and the same, but yours do not. I cant believe how long it is, i would have taken about 3 to 5 months for me to make something that long! O_o anyways, congradulations on ur fantastic flash!
I commend you!
lol!
Haha, I hope this makes front page! This was really good! Great Job!