Wow...
Dude! You have so much potential... this song just rules so much...
Hard to say which one's the winner. Yours sounds like something from an RPG, his sounds like a Megaman/Crash kinda song.
Dammit, both of yours are good in their own ways. Keep up the good work man... it's not like every person can be compared with ParagonX9 and actually stand a chance!
>:)