Well....
Well..it was OKAY, it wasn't really good. It needed a better plot, the story was a...cliche, I suppose. What could of improved it was actual voices instead of writing. Would of made a huge difference. Well anyway, you're going the right way. Hopefully your next flash (if you are making another one) will be better, looking forward to it.
Worth watching, at least.
A reasonable movie - some of the graphics are quite ugly, whereas others are fairly attractive, and a few have a definite style and personality to them. The music was well-chosen and effective, and the sound effects although jarring fit well with the visuals.
The most successful aspect of this flash is the narrative. Although the story and its eventual resolution are not exactly original, they are told well, at a fairly good pace (could be slightly faster in parts), and manage to provide some emotional impact.
I believe that the use of written text to convey meaning, rather than a spoken soundtrack, is exactly right for this type of movie - it enhances the suspense while preventing us from identifying too much with any one character (it encourages sympathy, not empathy). The stylised 'scribbled' fonts blend well with the overall feel of grime and twisted reason.
Congratulations, and keep up the good work. I hope you can take some positive tips from the feedback, and I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future.
Wow.
More than likely this horrible thing you've spawned here will be blammed.
However I am gonna give you some advice.
1: Put a preloader in your flash
2. Use voices. Dont scribble words on. Especially if you cant spell.
3. I realize you were trying to go for the whole "dark and mysterious" angle for this flash but you only acheived making it look emo. Rework your character designs.
4. Actually animate some stuff. Wiggling pictures are not animation.
WTF?
Graphics: The quality was at least acceptable but unimpressive and at best childish. I think much more time could have been taken with the animation.
Style: This was probably the most pathetically emo thing I have ever seen, and that really makes me feel sorry for you.
Sound: Instead of putting in voices, you scrawled words on the screen that were difficult to read and often went by too fast while I was trying to decypher your unintelligable penmanship. Subtitles would have been fine but voices would have been great. The music was also just about as emo as it gets. I was honestly impressed that there was noise for the gunshot.
Violence: I don't think that a badly-animated cell of a semi-stick man shooting himself in the head so his eyes can become x's is really violence.
Interactivity: There wasn't any.
Humor: It wasn't funny.
Overall: Try again. I'm sure that if you worked at it and tried for something a little less emo and a little more structured, you would have a great story. It was interesting, but it needs a LOT of work.