WTF?
The intro was too long, just to make a point about that, not really too important. But the actual flash itself was just like, what?
Alot of the sounds seemed to be out of place and some background music would have been nice, something calm maybe? Then come the dule add some more dramatic music.
The background, well, it was minimal, alittle more could have been done with the actual background. Maybe a diffrent colour to white, a visible ground, lose the spikes and think about adding more rocks. All possible suggestions, play around with it.
As for the storyline, that was just abit, diffrent, very unique but really not the most intresting of things to me, sorry. Some of the jokes used where kind of funny but more time actually put around the rest of it would have been good.
The two charectors you used where text. I haven't seen this done before really, or it's not a common idea to my knowladge so that was pritty good, having your own style is nice. But to use others ideas then mix them with your own would be acceptible too in my opinion.
Eh, I think that's about it.
You're flashs make me write such long reviews.
Anyway, keep experimenting.
2/5
<3