Reviews for The Wheel of Life

[NakedBatBoy]

Thoughtful

A great choice for the song. The art went very well with the sound. It was all in all good.

The only real problem was at the end when you say "You born" That's not actually correct english... you should say something like "You are born" or "You're Born"

Also, it should say "You get older" instead of "you live your life" because finding a woman is part of living your life... (if you're going to leave it saying "you live your life" then you can't have it say "you find a woman" or "You have kids" after that... because those are both part of living your life. You understand?

You just have to reword the ending a little for it to sound a little better. All around good, just a few gramatical errors. Nothing a quick rewrite can't fix! Bravo!

[GeishaAssassinX]

it is step one...

it was a bit too spaced out in my opinion... highlighting, i guess, what you think life is -- the words at the end need to be reviewed, too, because there are typos.

i gave you enough to pass you, it isnt terrible. i love the music... downcast...

[InvisibleRabbit]

Hm...

I thought this was good. Having no words made this serious. And on the very last scene, where you were saying how "You born," it should be "you're." Or, at the very least, "your."
Great flash, though!

[DIANESALUTE]

it's nice

there are too many flashes but it's emotional..

[amador10]

WTF

to tell you the truth, I wasn't impressed. there should be more to the flash than just fade ins and fade outs. it conveys a message, but this message is some sort of universal truth. WE ALREADY REALIZE THIS. Now shoo, before I complain some more. you get a 5 for graphix, because the flash looked good, but kept fading in and fading out, probably to shield your problem with movment of the birds or something...