It's got potential
You have great art skills, numerous voice actors at your disposal, and a decent sense of style but you waste it by cramming as many anime/action cliches into one flash as you can. I mean seriously... "I don't need luck..." come on...
The story needs more coherency too. Your flash seems like a jumble of ideas. I don't know if you've written the whole thing out already or are just sorta wingin' it but I think it would be a good idea to make a very simple/abreviated story outline then create episodes, dialogue, and action around it. And don't be TOO crytpic with the story either.