Pretty interesting track you've got here! There's lots and lots of detail, it's nice and busy but there's still a lot of space which is very hard to do. There's a good deal of attention paid to stereo imaging and the parts really compliment each other well.
You have cool melodies, good bass, good drum grooves that change around a fair bit. I like the Ridge Racer jazz chords that come in on 0:33 seconds. I also like the strings, they remind me of 'Push The Button' by the Chemical Brothers. I think you guys would enjoy One Watt Sun.
You seem to have a similar ethos to them; mid tempo, intricate stereo imaging, lots of little details, a fair bit of dirt.... Give 'em a listen!
Some of the cymbals are a little bit cheesy but in general the sounds are really good. Mastering wise, maybe you need to bring out the bass a bit more. The kick and the snare particularly don't appear to have a lot of punch to them. I'm not sure exactly what it is but for some reason the overall sound is a little bit weedy.
I really like the track overall though. There's lots of stuff to pick out and it warranted repeated listens. I love the cheeky cowbell on 2:46! Good stuff.
Wow thank you for the awesome review.
You right i was thinking about redoing the sounds of the drums i really just got lazy on it. Zstriefel composed all the drum but i redid them with different drum sounds..have no idea why i did that.
but yeah im glad you liked the stereo imaging. i actually spent a good amount of time on the train to work trying to get the sound in the headphones to match the sound in my head.
there actually is a whole storyline for this song, i have been looking for a lyricist/MC to compose the lyrics to no avail.. im not a very poetic or lyrical person.. i just have ideas.. yeah so i wrote a storyline for the song...... AAAAAANNNNDDDD here it is!
Beginning half intro :00 - :15
Builder is complaining about living in his mothers basement and mentioning his collection of music and audio equipment. As well and talking about how he has no friends.
End half of beginning intro :15 - :31
He has a eureka moment with the idea to build a robot from all the audio equipment he owns.
First Verse :31 - 1:20
He starts listing off equipment he has as well as preposterous notions as to what the robot will be made with. EX- Killing T-pain and putting his soul in a jar for the robots heart. Shoving a flux capacitor up the robots ass so the robot can travel through time. Chest is a subwoofer- head is a midi processor, legs are modified keytars, a therimin for a tail...etc.etc. At end of verse he says "And i named him Mr. Funkhousen"
Organ lead to bridge 1:21 - 1:45
He turns on the power to bring Mr. F to life, It doesnt work at first and he gets frustrated. power turns off at 1:35. his mother screams from upstairs about the noise at one point.
Organ bridge 1:45 - 1:52
Mr. F auto-tune groans and comes to life.
Organ Melody - 1:52 - 2:23
After coming to life mr.f sings about his capabilities and statuses. such as count bpm, rip a wicked keytar solo, flying, moonwalking and traveling through time, At one point he sings like barry white when he sings "And i can sound like Barry White for the ladies"... MR.F tells him to hop on to go to a party at a club in the year 2510~~or whatever rhymes with what is said.
At this point the builder is just a hype man agreeing and WOWing.
Hip Hop Club Bridge 2:23 - 2:55
Builder narrates that they arrive to a club floating thousands of feet up in the sky. They open the door and walk into the club in slow motion. Builder raps about Mr, F's ability to dance, blast music from his chest, How good he is with the ladies 'Shortay" Mr. F is singing along in the background and singing little things as builder raps.
1st half outro 2:55 - 3:11
Builder raps about how mr F grabbed a bottle of hennesy, chugs it and suggests they go hit an after party on new years eve 2999.
Outro 3:11 - END
Builder and Mr. F sing and rap about how this was the beginning of a great friendship between a man and a funky singing dancing robot. They go on about how they plan to keep hitting parties and travel through time together for the rest of eternity.
please let me know if you know anyone that can help out with this..
BTW_ i checked out the one watt sun link.. and you were right .. i INDEED liked it..one problem.. i cant seem to find out where i can get more of thier music.. i checked itunes and couldnt find em... i definitly digged their song aliens.
well anyway thank you for the sweet review.. it had showed me that ues ineed i need to get back on those cymbal hits and some of the drum sounds.
i give your a review a ten lolololol
peace love happiness and crunchy tunes lol
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-Quite an interesting collaborational work. The drum work is excellent in it's own regards and were mixed well even though they are a bit light. Come to think of it the instruments as a whole are very light. I'm guessing lyrical work was planned for this but still needs to be added.
-The only issue I had was with how much use of the cymbals there was. It's probably the pace setter you used but it drones on towards the end. Also the thirty blank seconds at the end. You can trim that stuff off.
Well right now newgrounds own BIGRED (Tingtonger) is composing the lyrics to this piece .. once i get the lyrical audio in there this is going to get revamped a bit. ill definitely take your cymbal comment into consideration while redoing some stuff. This song will actually be available on the haiti relief album coming out soon. If not the haiti relief album it will be on some sort of charity album.
Definitely from the start sounds like you wrote this for someone to sing/rap on top of. Simply because the mixing's pretty light and everything is generally in the sort of background. That being said though, you've got some nice instruments in this; good sounding synths, a pretty ace drum beat (Though I also think the cymbals were perhaps a little overdone). One thing I think this is probably lacking is a nice bass line. Like, a really bassy one, because you've got a bass here, but it's still pretty middle-ish in frequency, so you've pretty much got the mid-hi frequencies covered, but the bass lacking a little bit, save for the kick drum that comes in. That being said, the bass does get more prominent later on in the song, so perhaps it's just the start that needs a second look.
There's a nice bit of variety to this, which is good...I think some sections were a touch too long, but that would be remedied if you had someone with lyrics on top of it. Generally though, you've got a nice sounding track, here. I think while it is a standalone you could remix it so that the lead synth feels more like a lead instrument, until the time when you actually do get a vocalist to come in and take that main-interest role. You could probably go on the NG forums and try to find someone to do the vocals for you, there's a fair few singers/rappers on NG, that's for sure. In general, it's a pretty decent track. Nicely done.
LOL yeah the bass i used is actually a monosynth just played on a ow octave so it doesn't really get that bassy sound that it needs. When i revamp this for thew lyrics coming soon from newgrounds own mc BIGRED aka Tintonger. I did put some actual bass later in the song im glad you picked up on that. it took me a bit to mix that. Unfortunately i have to do most of my mixing with crappy speakers and or earbuds.
Tintonger had sent me some lyrics for the beginning of the song and just from hearing his other stuff i think this song is going to be a really awesome and creative one.
Im glad you like the variety whenever i am composing i never want it to get boring. if you check out some of my first submissions like dreamwalker or HIT ME organ donor you can see that i do alot of rhapsody type composing. Im really glad you liked this one. i spent alot of time on the train to work composing this a 1/2 hour at a time on my laptop using earbuds.
When i get the recorded lyrics from tintonger im going to remaster and revamp a few things so thank you for the constructive criticism, i will definitely take it into consideration while remastering this.
The completed song will be sold on a newgrounds charity album for either haiti or some other charity we come to an agreement to in the audio forums
