Hm
Well, your art was great and the story was fine, but the flash came across really choppy because of that 12 fps frame rate. Consider kicking it up to 20 or higher next time... that'll make the animation flow more smoothly. And, no, that is not the fault of my computer, I promise.
Congratulations on all of your success with this flash. Your next one will be even better if you watch that frame rate!