T.T
why do you gotta stop? i love these things lol well i hope u go back to finishing this one day...also add some like...pictures..or making the text appear faster -.- it was interesting too...nd ur really good at painting a picture with ur words so i think its a shame that u had to stop >.<
So sad to see you go!
I have to admit that I am a fan of your work. I'm very sad to see that you won't be making contributions to Newgrounds anymore. I also wanted to mention that I appreciate that you responded to my review of your other submission. It's gratifying to see contributors taking an interest in their audiences. Although I'm not sure if you're too wrapped up to see the review, I will make a few suggestions that will hopefully help you in whatever other endevours you may be planning.
The most glaring flaw with this submission is that it's incomplete, but as you've already adressed this I shall move on. There were some grammatical and spelling errors (though occasionally they are unavoidable)but the story flows well. The other thing I might suggest for this type of entry is a variable text speed (some of us read extremely fast) or perhaps the ability to skip text that we've already viewed.
I hope that you read this and that it helps you in some way (or at the very least that another contributor reads this and finds something useful). I also would like to wish you luck in whatever situations life may give you. You are a blessing as an artist and I'll miss you and your work.
Farewell, wherever you fare
Carni
A fine third story
Of course, I think we all would've preferred if you had finished the "good girl" portion, but on the whole, combined with the other two, I think this would be a great series. This one was a bit more intricate than the other two, and it certainly offered a different situation from the last two which were more trial-and-error based.
Arrivederci!
pismojado is right
TRUE THAT
What a break.
Yea, it could be finished and it could have a few images.