Reviews for War Is Near (unfinished)

[MegamanMegafan]

Going against what the others say.

While I see that other reviews are saying this is finished, I have to say, I don't think the same way.
If left as is, I would actually give something like this a 7 out of 10.
BUT! I really feel there is a lot of potential here, so I give it a 9/10 now.
I would really like to see some changes take place, and hopefully I can give you some helpful tips. I want to be able to save this to my computer and listen to it when its done.

I have several tips to give you and hopefully they help.
- First let me say, this song is going to have to be longer by at least 30 more seconds. It seems to end prematurely. But that's not something you just fix so easily, so take it one step at a time and then see where you are at.
- Make the chords in the beginning start out louder and clearer, and then maybe work it down to the tone that it is now. I feel the chords should be more distinct, and that is why I say make it clearer. Just like when you find yourself having trouble saying a certain word, you articulate what you say so that it comes of clearer. If that makes sense.
- Between 0:22 and 0:41-ish I suggest doing something about the long notes in the strings. It goes like: 1-2-345 1-2-345--6 and such and so on. The 1-2-34 are (or should be) the short notes and the 5--6 are the long notes. Drag out the long notes a little more, and if it sounds right to you, maybe make them oscillate a bit (your choice).
- And about the snare drum. I think it may just be my imagination... But I think it needs to sound sharper...
- You need to do something about the brass that enters at 0:44.
- At 0:45 I start hearing some kind of metronome or something that goes off every second. That needs to go away all together. It is so annoying and so distracting that I can't give you any advice between 0:45 and 1:01
- From 1:18 to the end, there is something odd about the brass. Not sure what it is, but it should be fixed.
- Once you have made fixes to what is already there, maybe you could see about extending it. Think about doing something a little more. Its up to you.

So yes, this is unfinished, but I believe you can make it better. Hopefully some of my advice helps. Maybe not all of it. But yeah... work on it.

AudioVision responds:

Yea I basically had problems with all the same things you did. My program for music making also vexes me some times.

[Animith]

So...this was awesome.

Seeming as everyone else has said this is fine as it is, I'm going to listen to it as if it's a finished piece.

Nice start; it's simple, but you can tell it's going to build up into something huge.
The staccato cellos (I think?) at 0:23 are nicely done, just giving it that extra edge of pace.
The sudden buildup at 0:45 is again, very well done. Simple but epic melody, nice underlying chords.
The part around 1:10 where it kind of goes to build up into something huge again, before dropping down to almost nothing is possibly my favourite part. Because it builds the anticipation like nothing else.
The ending is abrupt, but fittingly so.

If this is the UNFINISHED version? I'd hate to see what kind of mastery you come up with when you think it's done. I think you're possibly being too critical of your own work; you can't think of what to do because there's nothing else to be done. You could easily leave it as it is. I refer to your average scores to lend a credence to this. Very nicely done.

AudioVision responds:

Well damn now I might leave the thing as is! Thanks for the review!
And yes, staccato cellos.

[AngelofPeace]

Excellent!

I agree with LegendarySleuthLoki (dude, nice name by the way!), you could leave it the way it is and you still get tens. There is, like, no way that I could make something like this, and I think you did a great job on it.

AudioVision responds:

Well thanks man!

[LegendarySleuthLoki]

Hey now!

Who say's this baby is unfinished? I sure as hell don't. The way it is right now? Perfect. I can't name any flaws. It encompasses the mind with the vision of a battlefield or soldiers marching, casualties perhaps. The way I see it, the fact that you are actually posting it when it is what seems to you "unfinished" means you should be satisfied. ^_^

This is perfect for a trailer to an animation or something. But even WITHOUT a video, or even a title, I can imagine different scenes of a war. To be able to accomplish that is to be as skilled as a professional, methinks.
Cheers,
Your second reviewer,
Jack

AudioVision responds:

Thanks for the review! Makes me feel all warm and fuzzyyy

[FarFromSundown]

pretty epic

really good work. I do wish you'd finish it, but for what it's worth, what you have here is outstanding.

AudioVision responds:

Thanks! I probably will finish it at some point.