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Reviews for "Dont Diet..."

Doesn't flow

I think you could make this flow much better by making the dream sequence more to do with food (since it's about dieting) and having a more consistent style. I would definitely suggest adding more detail; the white background and sketchy animation doesn't fit well with the character you've drawn. Having the character bounce through a dreamworld of twinkies and carrots battling to the death would fit much better with the theme than a bunch of random math equations and a talking carrot. It's okay to be a little random as it can add humor to the flash, but throwing some stuff together and then slapping a punchline on it isn't very entertaining. You can make this idea work. It just needs, at the very least, a vague storyline.

evil-burp responds:

Uhhh.... CABAGE!!!!
ok
ill remeber that

No talking carrots!

Make it longer, and don't make talking carrots, then re-submit it, and it will probably go through, but at it's current stage, I doubt it will go through.

evil-burp responds:

THE WORLD IS RULED BY TALKING CARROTS!!
INSULT THEM AND THEY'LL EAT YOUR BRAINS!!!!!

random at best

It started out good,kinda had a David Firth style to it.Then,i seen the retarded talking carrot...i mean wtf was that about lol.

evil-burp responds:

lol

Decent

The movie had a nice flow through it.
Though, i must say, i didnt like the speaking. I think the movie would have been better off without.
Anyway, the nightmare was well done, i like bizarre.

evil-burp responds:

ok
i didnt even do the speaking
i spent ages trying to get the guy to talk in this wierd language when he woke up but the audio was REALLY stuffed so yeah

Hmm

You are one weird mofo. but that was pretty cool. add some story to it in the waking life

evil-burp responds:

I sure am
"Dont mess with me!" he said as the earth devoured his soul and he was reduced to a puddle of tears and the only living thing he could see was a dark world
anyway
thanx