Reviews for slackers episode0:the bum

[djleeroy]

Great first attempt

Instead of making still symbols and tweening them across the screen, try using a few more layers and make up the character models using those layers and making a walk animation (If that made ANY sense at all... hardly makes sense to me). I would probably recommend improving the intro. The sounds were a bit lacking and a bit too far apart. The intro doesn't have to be long but you got a good idea for yours. Just make it a bit shorter.
For a first submission, it's great. I know from experience it takes ages to make your first Flash so I can appreciate how the art is somewhat lacking.
What won me over was the Magic Roundabout theme when the bum kinda "introduced" himself.
Great work. Make more. I'll be interested to see how well you come along.

exocel responds:

i didnt say it in the cartoon but only the bum can hear the music, the other guy (watch this space youl'l see him again) just saw a nutjob wearing one sandal shaking his head.lol.

[LadyAnimation]

I certainly hope he wasn't as nuts

The story and graphics were done way better than most first submissions, but you seriously need to animate some more. There was hardly any movement and also hardly anything happened. Just some wacko saying crazy stuff. It was funny, but it could've been done better. Also, why was the intro so different from the actual flash?

exocel responds:

im thinking about making the intro a continuos thing between every flash i make, kinda like a trademark of my own cartoons.

[DarthPejka]

okay...

since this is your first, I'm gonna be constructive...
first of all... AUDIO COMPRESSION!! file size was too large for this to stay on the portal, so it'll quite possibly get blammed...
second, graphics were relatively good, but you need some animation, at least make the bum have a walking animation... and even though the guy didn't have any lips, you could synchronize it with what he says.
third, the least important, the intro sequence was too long... make the "underground films presents" sequence shorter...
overall not too shabby, and get a real voice actor, maybe record your own voice and distort it a bit.
that would be all.
Darth Pejka

exocel responds:

cheers, i was gonna voice it myself but i thought the microsoft mike just sounded creepier, and he was meant to be limping but for some reason the dragging sound he made isnt playing.
as for the lip syncing ,yep it sucks, i dont think more needs to be said about that, the biggest thing that pissed me off was the bllody button i couldnt get to work at the end!!!.
h well, its only my first try and i made it in 7 hours in one sitting so wether it does good or not ,i aint bothered people are watching it so what more do i need than that?,
cheers for the advice,
exocel.