Needs work
Well I'm not sure what you were doing here you have the sprite, and the backgrounds to go with it. Yet the story was not that great.
You seemd to be goign some where. Then we got to the end of the flash and it just flopped. The text ending was disapointing.
I think you should have show it rather than give the summary.
Then the scene after the text made less sense, had no real humor value at all. The sound you uased for the text boxes was a little annoying as well.
I would suggest showing more action next time.