nice piece
sounds nice, i hear some knowledge of music in here...
i also hear you could do better
you didnt need much time on this, probably 6 maybe 7 hours i guess
(correct me if im wrong)
imagen if you put in another 4 / 5 hours, just expending the variation in your piano play. tweak some notes. perfection it.
i dont know exactly how to say it.. the piece sounds like you chose notes that were easy to write, its all predicteble and in order.
good work on volume though...
add some more background instruments to fill it up, and smooth the bits over, use more percussion (kettledrums!!) and bring more variation in peruccion too. (and a bit louder)