Reviews for Ham Abuse

[jaydeeleonwell]

um...

Personally, I think it was pretty funny. I'm not sure if this will get psat judgement though because you've resubmitted it without changing much. You changed the storyline a little as instead of having him randomly walk off, he gets pushed instead. I would have kept it the old way. But I'm not the author. I think to improve it from the last one, try to add more to it instead of a few more backgrounds. Make him do something other than walk near the start. Add a background story. Music? I'm just giving you ideas, its for you to decide your next move. But still, I think it was ok and hope for you it gets past judgement, so best of luck! *fingers crossed* lol.

Crusty-Wiwuh responds:

It did have a quiet slow eiry tune in the background, it was just hard to hear over the sound effects in places. Thanks for the positive feedback, I should have added more of a story but it seems to be going pretty well at the moment.

[seeingeyeturtle]

I think it's safe to say

that we just don't get it. it's not bad, it just doesn't say enough. guy goes for a walk and gets eaten by a shark... who pushed him? whats with the green shadowy thing? whats with the fire? one or all of these should get answered.

Crusty-Wiwuh responds:

Yeah your right, I did underestimate the importance of a plot, The next thing I make will tell a story.

[howdy-cowboys]

Dun...Dun...Dun (Theme Music From Jaws)

Made me laugh, isn't the best graphics but the way you put it together made me laugh (the ending :D)

Crusty-Wiwuh responds:

Thanks, I guess I could have tried harder with some of the graphics

[SpoonHunter]

Keep trying

I saw both versions of this flash. While you may have changed some things in this one, I still think that it needs some sort of central plot to it, because this one doesn't really pull me in as a viewer. If you're aiming for a random-humor flash, which I think your animation is going towards right now, you should throw some more comedy into it. Maybe give him a hardcore case of flatulence or something. Either way, maybe a bit of spoken dialogue or thought from the main character's perspective would help you out. Don't give up!

[1]

Yeah, I liked it.

However, more of a story element is needed. The animation was performed pretty damn well, and I can tell you worked pretty hard to make sure it didn't get blammed this time.

As far as the story is concerned though, it needs improvement.

Crusty-Wiwuh responds:

Thankyou. I now realise that a flash needs a good story to be really appreciated, and I have some storyboards I have been working on, so my future submissions will have decent plots.