Voltron remake?
I am guessing you are trying to copy the style of old cartoons like Voltron. If that is the case, I applaud your first attempt. It has a lot of the same stylistic effects: repeated graphical events, low movement, and choppy storylines. The music is good and helped me to sit throguh the whole thing.
BTW, who was that at the end that Patrick was asking forgiveness from? I wanted to see, but I couldn't bear to watch the whole thing again just to find out.
Keep trying.