Good try.
I couldn't read most of what you wrote (and I'm a fast reader), because it flashed by too fast. You gave the same amount of time to read ten words as you did a full screen. The movie didn't make much sense, and was short, but it had good style to it.
It could have been better.
The concept is okay, but I think you could have put it together a little differently. Also the text came a little to fast to read all of it. Not bad but it could have been better.
Holy...
I actually... LIKED it. Wow. Congrats. Normally i blam right away after seeing new flash animation.
More action!
You will need to show some more scenes! More action! I didnt really get much since there were no scenes where the action happend. Good graphics anyways.